Please what do you think of this poem?

be honest please thanks a lot





Reasons for life





Sometimes we need some reasons

To relish the coming seasons

To keep breathing smiling and hoping

To continue expecting a happy ending

Sometimes we scream out for motivation

To get through a harsh situation

A powerful feeling that push us every morning to wake up

To try one million times and never give up

Give us a reason to live

Something real and positive

Give me a reason to stay

That’s what I pray for everyday

Give them a reason to smile

Do it! It’s worth while

Because one day you’ll need reasons too

That day you’ll be waiting for rescue

You’ll try to act on the big stage of life

Hidden by a mask, between your mind and soul will be strife

Either to bury your misery

And show to people a fake glory

Or accept your destiny

And be optimistic so you’ll live in harmony

Pretend to be or just be?

This will be your Hamlet’s question maybe.

Please what do you think of this poem?
It's pretty good. I especially liked the last line and the reference to Hamlet. Also the two lines:



"A powerful feeling that push us every morning to wake up

To try one million times and never give up"



those were good... the way they sound, particularly ending with the same word, that similarity lends a spoken logic into the already sensible advice given.



The main recommendation I'd give is to pay attention to the punctuation. If you're not going to add punctuation, don't. But the moment you add an exclamation point or comma, the reader begins searching for such guidelines, and thereafter they read all the lines all muddled up. I think adding punctuation throughout the entire poem would strengthen the way it's delivered. It would allow the reader to read it closer to how you meant it.



Overall good read!
Reply:Ehhhh. I prefer poems where people aren't trying so hard to rhyme.



There are parts of it I liked though. SORRY! I basically like the concept, but think it would be better just to write from your heart and not focus so much on the rhyme.
Reply:It's pretty good It kind of reflects my current situation

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Reply:Beautiful! I give it an 8.5 :)
Reply:it's nice