2012年2月14日星期二

Is this a good poem?

It's for my favorite teacher whenever I graduate from middle school and go into high school:



We were buddies, amigos, friends. We shared too many memories to count. Thanks for listening to me.



Everyday I said good morning, I said goodbye every afternoon. Whenever I said, "Have a nice weekend, Mr. Boley," it was always said in a cheerful way. Thanks for listening to me.



Our little jokes we shared makes me wish I'd never leave, and when I do, will you remember me? In 10 years, will you think back to that girl who wasn't afraid to be a dork in front of everyone? Thanks for listening to me.



Art was fun, especially when I drew ninjas and dragons, and had glory, at least for a while. Youwere the first one I shwed it to, "God job, Nicole," you'd aften say, I smiled and was modest, "It's not that good, really.." was my usual response, I knew my art was good, and you did, too. Thanks for listening to me.



I'll always be a kid, and if I am, will you be one with me, too? I may be small, but I'm going to be famous someday, just ou wait. And when I accept my awards, I will say, "Thanks for listening to me, Mr. Boley."



I leave middle school behind, and head into the great unknown. Maybe someone will listen to me as well as you did. Most likely not. If we never meet again, you won't be forgotten by the class of 2012. I will remember you. Try not to forget me, like so many others will. Mr. Boley, thanks for listening to me, teacher man.



Always,

Nicole





Remember these words-



"Sing your song, dance your dance, tell your tale."

Is this a good poem?
It is a nice essay, but, I'm sorry to say, It is not a poem. It has no meter, rhythm, word flow, or any other poetic redeeming quality. Even at that, he'll love it, because you have put beautiful sentiment into it.



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Reply:No!
Reply:oh god it's too long to read
Reply:awww, ya thats really good. i like the "remember these words" part too, nice job
Reply:It is a really good poem.

Take out the word 'buddies'
Reply:Very nice Nicole. I doubt that Mr. Boley will ever forget you.
Reply:I like it. You have some talent.

I personally think if I was this teacher, I'd be honored.

(:
Reply:itsa good poem it`s just why you keep saying thanks for listening to me.
Reply:GOOD POEM I MAY SAY !!!!!!!!!!!!

really not joking

if it is not copied then iy is really good

from today i m ur fan young lady

if possible even send me ur other poems also

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u have a good talent

keep it RUNNING !!!!!!

all ur feelings have poured from ur heart

it is really good

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Reply:It is a very good poem, but you have made it a tad too personal. Maybe if you remove the buddies, it maynot sound too close. Remember his reputation.
Reply:awwww, your teacher will be very touched that you wrote this! watch for spelling errors, though...if youre trying to perfect it. it is very sweet, and any teacher would be so touched to have it.
Reply:it sounds more like a letter then a poem. but its a good letter...hope that helps ??
Reply:What you call a poem, I call "something written personally to a teacher in a yearbook".



It's not a poem. I'm glad you enjoyed school.
Reply:it doesn't really seem like a poem but would be a really nice speech/ letter. I like the repetition of "thanks for listening to me"



also, "Teacher man" is kinda weird, don't you think? funny but weird.
Reply:I wouldn't say it's a good poem, but it is great in so many ways. Your teacher will love it. You put a lot of thought, effort and expression into it. It's something he will cherish and give him the inspiration to continue being a caring teacher for all his students.
Reply:I think He'll like it. You made a few mispellings, but that's the only thing I see wrong with it. Nice job!



This kinda reminds me of Mr. Crowley, lol.
Reply:YES it is very sweet and caring!
Reply:it's okay but don't make it so detailed and stuff

"thanks for listening to ME"
Reply:Often is spell "often" not "aften". There are some little mistakes in your poem. Mainly spelling mistake.

Your poem doesn't rhyme, but it sounds good and makes sense. I give you kudos for that. I am sick of the traditional "rhyming poems".

Anyways, this would be a very good present for your teacher. Art is not the only thing you're talented at.

Keep it up.



Best of luck!


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